It's a beautiful poem... I love it

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It is truly beautiful. Such true, meaningful words come from you.

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well. before i go about senselessly spewing forth praise for this i have to say a few things.

first, i'll give you a little praise to start off this comment. those are some god aweful good looking legs. whose are they? oh wait...

secondly i'll delve into the things that are wrong. the last line is jarring to me.. you've known me how long? and you've never picked up on my philosophy, my way of life, of never saying goodbye? you know even that day, the last day I'll ever see emoleah i didn't say goodbye.

thirdly i'll get to the senseless praise. I like the rain. its a nice addition... and i don't know why but i get this spinning feel... where every thing just stops and the camera is spinning around the two kissing (around me and emoleah i guess). great imagry with the rain, it really sets the mood (though this may be spoiled by the fact that i'm remembering the day).

fourthly, i reread it. and now looking at it you said 'Their only goodbye.' so scratch my point number two. only... not. because you imply a goodbye, wich i am still against.



lastly, i miss emoleah. umm... very good work on this, and those pictures you sent me are so sad. to bad they didn't turn out better.

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Face the world with eyes of fire,
and burn it all to ash.

"The world rotates at perfect pace" good line.
I like how the rain wasn't as much after the kiss, and the imagery in the first stanza.

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It may be sappy and Cleche'et but none the less romantic, and completely amazingly written, I must face this

Some lovely imagery in this, almost metaphorical I guess. As I don't know the people involved in the kiss I can't really comment on some of the deeper layers in this, however, on the surface it's beautifully written, and lovely to read.
Well done!

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The beginning of wisdom is accepting that you know nothing - Socrates

Liri

wow, its like your writing about me here, *snaps outa it* well in any case its a great poem

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And you shall shed tears of scarlet

Here is a boy with paper skin, who longs to touch the girl of broken glass, she loves it when he wears his skin like that, In tatters

I love the way you make the world seem to know that pure love is ever more important than it's own existance at that precious moment in time. A great way to show how powerful true emotions can be, especially in a situation where the two know it will be their last embrace. The words you used could not be asslembled any better. And as far as the "goodbye" in the end, it helps close the poem with a bittersweet emotion, even if that word is against what he feels. Nicely done.

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You know whats one of the hardest things to find these days?

A well-written romantic poem.

Goddamn, its refreshing to find one.